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Post by Sachi;;Tsunade on Feb 23, 2008 12:31:38 GMT -5
I've decided to change the plot...again. Does anyone have any ideas?
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Post by Shadow Dragon on Feb 23, 2008 12:32:38 GMT -5
Do you have any ideas in particular? Or any specifications? Like details that you want to have in the plot, or need in the plot?
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Post by Sachi;;Tsunade on Feb 23, 2008 12:40:33 GMT -5
I don't know...I would like something to do with the extinct clans and obviously, Uchiha Sasuke. I would like to have most of the extinct clans to be, well, not extinct. (Like Uchiha and Kaguya, and Haku's Clan)
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Post by Shadow Dragon on Feb 23, 2008 12:42:24 GMT -5
Ok, I'll start trying something. Last question is, How long do you want it to be? I can make a longer type of plot with paragraphs for various things that piece themselves together. And for your info board I can try something like a quick summarization and a quick-link the the bigger plot if you want?
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Post by Sachi;;Tsunade on Feb 23, 2008 12:46:51 GMT -5
Hm...Maybe like 3 to 5 paragraphs long in general, and like about 2 or 3 for the info box. Thanks  |
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Post by Shadow Dragon on Feb 23, 2008 13:52:46 GMT -5
Deep within the forests of the Whirpool Country, a shinobi raced away from his pursuers. With three quick steps, he landed on a tree branch, his black hair flying back with his sudden stop. Pivoting on his left foot, he spun around. "Kiragakure no Jutsu." Bringing his hands together, a mist suddenly erupted around the area, lowering his opponent's vision completely. His face parts in slight shock at the strength of the mist as he performs new hand seals. "Hyouton: Makyou Hyoushou!" Mirrors or pure, crystalline ice surrounded his two pursuers. Dancing back and forth from mirror to mirror, the shinobi killed his pursuers. As they died, the mist departed. The shinobi landed on the ground, looking up he spoke to the darkness surrounding him in the forest. "Why did you help me, and who are you?" Suddenly a kunoichi around his age landed on the ground not too far away. The female ninja waited patiently as another man walked out of the forest. He spoke in a serious tone, "We are some of the remaining members of the Haku Bloodline. Constantly hunted, like you we've hidden ourselves from the world. However, I believe it is time we showed ourselves and our true strength. I ask you once, will you join us in our conquest?" As he spoke, the young ninja looked at him intently. Sizing the man up for a moment, the shinobi nodded. The older man walked away into the forest, the other two following him to begin their preperations. Far away from the Water Country, in the Mountain Country, a loud noise could be heard from the mountainside. A boulder stood lodged, blocking a cave that looked like it was sealed up for years and years. Suddenly, a hand broke through the stone. Bones exploded from the hand, tearing the rocks to pieces. As a tall man walked out, his laugh hard and triumphant. "Haha, I have finally done it. I am now completely stronger than Kimimaru. It IS done." He walked on about a mile, into a camp. The others looked up at him and nodded, speaking to him. "Aye Ryuumaru, I see we came at the right time. You have finished, yes?" Ryuumaru looked at the man who spoke and smiled. "Yes my Kaguya brethren, we now have the power to destroy the home country that caused our near extinction. We now have true power." Their laughs could be heard far away, extending on throughout the night.. Far from the sounds of the laughter, in the edges of the Fire country a boy and his father walked on. A group of five men walked up to the two travelers from afar, greeting them The leader of the group spoke first, addressing the boy's father. "Sir, is it true you are the long lost illegitimate brother of the now deceased Obito Uchiha?" The man winced in pain as his illegitimacy was mentioned in front of his son, but nodded. He spoke to the leader in a serious tone, suspicious of what they wanted. "Yes, I am Kazuma Uchiha. What is it that you want?" The leader peered carefully at him. "My clan-brother. I am Taisuke Uchiha. We are some of the remaining Uchiha who escaped Konoha before the fiend Itachi Uchiha destroyed our brethren. We need you. To reclaim our name and remove the shame from the Uchiha lineage. Will you join us in our journey to revive the Uchiha clan and become known once more?" The man sighed and looked down at his son before giving his answer. "Very well. A better future for my son, I'll do whatever it takes." Nodding, the group walked off into the sunset, heading towards their future. Far from Konoha, from the rest of the world. Not near enough to be part of the Fang or Claw Countries, not necessarily in a country itself; lay a cave. Deep within the cave, far underground and away from the rest of the world stood six shinobi. The sat down in a wide circle, drawing a circle of blood in front of them. They then opened six scrolls and began chanting. When the chanting was finished, they cut their left thumbs and smeared the Kanji for "demon" on the scrolls. In unison, they all yelled "Oni Shoukan: Yomi no Mikoto " as the jutsu took effect. The circle grew crimson red, the blood flowing to the center. A large, gaping abyss now stood there. Rising from the hole was a tall man, dressed in dark black and crimson clothes. As he rose, the abyss closed underneath him. Laughing out loud, he looked towards the men. "Ahhhh. At long last I am free. You shall be my greatest warlords with immense power, my true followers." With a wave of his hand, the blood from the circle rose up, piercing each man through the heart. As they died, he smiled and spoke again, "Ahh. As the Lord of the Underworld your spirits serve me much better than your mortal bodies." With another wave of his hand, their spirits rose and took shape. Each demonic in appearance, chakra flowed from their bodies like water from a river. He laughed once more, recalling something from his past. "That idiot Tengu, being trapped so easily by the Uchiha brat Madara. I must deal with his seal eventually and free him. I won't fall like he did." With an evil grin, the demon blew a hole through the cave. Rising up, he yelled to the world, announcing his coming. "I am free! Beware world, now no one can save thee." The end? Maybe. That was the bigger version. Reference for Tengu: Tengu StoryI need to work on the summary, but will this story work for you Sachi? |
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Post by Harris on Feb 23, 2008 14:02:19 GMT -5
Spead it out with news from each village. Make it like 20 years into the future. The Akatsuki was destroyed and rebult, and Sasuke is still hunting Itachi, who is still attempting to catch The bijuu.
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Post by Shadow Dragon on Feb 23, 2008 14:05:53 GMT -5
Well I can do that, but I don't see how that's part of the revival of the supposedly extinct clans? If you really want I can add that in but I might have to make an entirely different storyline. This storyline itself can take place at any time. I forgot to put in that the kaguya who's stronger than Kimimaru trained for fifteen years. So that would mean about near twenty years after the current Naruto time-line if you wanted it like that. Or you could leave it as it is which doesn't give a direct time.
So, you really want information about Sasuke, Itachi, and Akatsuki as part of the main plot? Or something new and different?
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Post by Harris on Feb 23, 2008 14:12:32 GMT -5
Add in the line "it has been discovered that members from the Uchiha clan, along with many other dead clans, survived, but have been acting as Farming companies" ect.
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Post by Shadow Dragon on Feb 23, 2008 14:13:51 GMT -5
Like, add it as a news flash from runners of different villages? Wouldn't it be better as a surprise for the villages? Because I don't really see how the majority of them could find out.. Also, what do you mean by farming companies? o.o
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Post by Harris on Feb 23, 2008 14:17:03 GMT -5
make it so they went seemingly by as normal, none ninja, people, locking their Traits up, but recently returned as ninjas and revealed their traits.
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Post by Shadow Dragon on Feb 23, 2008 14:20:44 GMT -5
Oh, you want me to post like.. How they showed their existence in their villages and stuff?
If that's the case. How about this.. I keep the above as the plot and make sub plots for a couple members of various clans to show how the world itself began to notice them? You can help me decide which clans if that's your idea. And if this is what you want and have any ideas about how any members of the clans would show their traits, you can tell me that too or post it or whatever. Lol
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Post by Sachi;;Tsunade on Feb 23, 2008 14:34:19 GMT -5
The general plot is really 'interesting', or it's very good. The sub-plot ideas would work too, so you and Harris and decide on that.. Thanks! ;D I'll put it in the ANU history thread |
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Post by Harris on Feb 23, 2008 14:42:09 GMT -5
Make it like the Bone Clan made a suprise assult on the village, revealing they still lived, and then the Uchiha's Fight back and reveal their eye with 100s of ninjas to see.
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Post by Shadow Dragon on Feb 23, 2008 14:45:18 GMT -5
Ahh ok, I see what you mean. Sounds like a good idea. I'll start working on it later because I think I'll be going shopping in a bit.
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